For my Japan 322 class (Modern Japanese Literature), we are to write a short story in the perspective of a woman who has experienced immediate post-war Japan. We are to write in her perspective and then justify the style of story and the themes in it.
The result is the following. I haven’t written in ’story-style’ for a while, so I’m unsure how good the story is. Read it and tell me what you think.
Therapy Sessions
“Am I … Am I like him?”
“At first, you were. Now, I’m not sure.”
“I don’t understand.”
“I see you as you; here right, right now. If you were him as he were, I don’t think I could love you.”
“Why? What happened between you and him?”
“Well, when we — ”
“Shh, don’t say anymore.”
“Why?”
“You’ll forgot that I’m the one that’s here, not him”
She was lying on her back, with his head resting on her shoulder. The darkness transfixed her; took possession of her, enveloped and penetrating. She summoned for all her remaining strength, straining every nerve, and waited for death. The darkness — the infinite night of formless immensity of space — extended and grew larger and larger around her as she seemed to be growing smaller and smaller. She waited … She pressed her hands to her face. Her hands and fingers grew cold, numb and hard. She wanted to scream …
***
Relationships inevitably encounter rough patches, but this one seemed … ominous. Lately she’d been wondering how much longer she could go on without listening to the doubting voices in her head, without looking at the discouraging signs along the way.
Tonight she’d come home from the Colemans to find the dinner dishes still stacked in the sink, Johnny sprawled in front of the television. She’d gone to him, kissed him, and had barely noticed his response. Then she’d gone to the kitchen, cleaned up, made her lunch for the next day, hearing the canned laugh track mingled with Johnny’s occasional laughter, louder than usual. It was hard not to feel as though he was rubbing it in that he was enjoying himself while she slaved away.
But she couldn’t think that way. Johnny worked hard — most engineers did, long hours and often late — and she wanted him to have his wind-down time, his leisure.
She just wanted him to need her with him enough so that maybe one day he’ d turn off the TV and come and help her. Really talk to her and really listen. The way he used to.
Jane sighed and pulled her feet up on the window seat, arms around her knees. Jane could see it now: Johnny would look at her like why she was making such a big deal out of everything? With the implied “again” at the end. Life is beautiful, he’d say. You wake up, you do stuff, you go to bed.
Wake up. Do stuff. Go to bed. Wake up. Do stuff. Go to bed. Wake up. Do stuff. Go to bed. Everyday. Yes, but there used to be more magic, even in that. Not this long winding journey into the banal.
The tears slowed; she sniffed and wiped them away with the back of her hand.
A slight sound made her jump; she turned to see Johnny, bed-ruffled, puzzled, half-asleep, swaying in the doorway of the living room, his tall, beautifully muscled body illuminated by the white light from the street behind her.
“Jane? Janey?” He frowned and peered at her across the room. “Why’d you get out of bed?”
“I couldn’t sleep.”
He squinted and took a step toward her. “Are you crying?”
She hesitated. If she said no, she’d be lying. If she said yes, she’d have to explain.
“Well, are you crying or not?”
“I was.”
He made a sound of exasperation. “You’re sitting here crying in the middle of the night? For what reason?”
Jane remained silent. She barely could get a word out for the hot, miserable weight in her chest.
He put his hands on his hips, glaring at her. Opened his mouth to say something, then lifted his one hand and let it slap on his flannel-covered thigh. “Fine. No reason. Good night.”
He walked out of the room, stumbled and swore. She heard the headboard bounce against the wall as he flung himself into their bed. He’ll sleep badly now and blame it on her. Wake up in a bad mood and they’d eat breakfast she prepared in silence that was starting to become horribly familiar.
Jane hugged her knees close to her chest, rested her chin on top of them and let the tears flow again.
She loved John. She loved him with all her heart and had since they’d first met in college — six years ago at the beginning of their senior year — and had begun dating within 3 months of friendship.
But something wasn’t working. Something she had no control over. She wanted him, but she couldn’t make him want her. She wiped the remaining tears and sniffed. She didn’t know exactly what it was or when it had happened or even how to identify it so she could begin to fix it. All she knew was that she was deathly afraid that it would end up tearing them apart.
Small steps is all it takes.
She straightened her back and walked slowly to the kitchen, careful to not make noise. She found the phonebook, took the phone off the hook, searched the directory and dialed.
***
Jane Doe waited patiently in the hospital waiting room for the operation to end. Her eyebrows furrowed into worry as sweat beads began to form. The operation wasn’t suppose to take this long; the procedure was suppose to have ended an hour ago.
The television adjacent to her suddenly flickered on and shouted, ” — FOR YOUR UNIQUE NEEDS, FOR YOU AND YOU ALONE –” and then nothing as the nurse quickly shut the dial. The nurse mumbled, “I hate these faulty televisions sets and these stupid mandatory advertisements. They’re not suppose to be in hospitals.”
She looked around as she wheeled the television set out of the room, caught Jane’s eye and continued her lecture, “I think it’s stupid. Don’t you?” She eyed Jane with a stern look that could only be appeased by complying.
“Yes.” The nurse gave a curt nod and wheeled off as the doctor came in.
Jane stood up to see eye-to-eye to the short pudgy man in the white coat.
“Is he … is he o-ok?”
The doctor removed his spectacles and beamed his small teeth to her. “The operation was a complete success. John Smith, your fiance, is now equipped with the latest bio-engineered empathy chip: the Nexus Empathy Brain Unit 6. It’s better than the last one we gave him. In fact, I think he’s better all around now that he’s partially machine.” He came up to her and whispered. “Oh, the last model forgot to install Romance ver. 3.5. Haha. Manufacturers still make silly mistakes.” He chuckled at his own joke and Jane impatiently held out her hand, anxious for the little machine he was about to give her.
“Now, Janey, you take this dial and …”
***
Johnny poked his head into their kitchen, dressed in his holiday outfit of dark pants and necktie and the red sweater Jane bought specifically for the occasion, jingling the keys impatiently. “Ready?”
Jane looked around at the table covered with cookies she had yet to pack into tins and bit back the obvious reply, DOES IT LOOK LIKE I’M READY? “Not yet.”
“Want some help?” He jingled the keys again to the tune of Jingle Bells until she wanted to rip them out of his hand and throw them out the window.
“No thanks,” she tersely replied. “I can handle it.”
He glanced at the kitchen clock. “I thought you wanted to leave at one.”
She stiffened. Okay, so she was late, why not rub it in a little more? She stopped packing the cookies, frustrated as hell. 4 months had passed since the hospital for their “therapy session” — the term she convinced Johnny was the solution for the random flashes of memories he suffers from. May be nothing had changed. May be she was creating a fantasy. She reached underneath her apron and fingered a small machine with an equally small dial in her jean pocket; she remembered what the doctor told her, “Turn this dial and the settings change. This will make him comply.”
“Jane? Janey?” Johnny stared to stare at her and began to snap his fingers in front of her eyes. “Are you even paying attention?”
She turned the dial. Johnny stiffened and his eyes dilated for a brief moment. A flash of consciousness and recognition, then his shoulders relaxed and he was back to a natural, normal state. He walked up to Jane and he found her mouth for a brief kiss.
“What was I talking about honey?”
Jane smiled. “Nothing important. Wait in the living room.” He quizzically glanced around the kitchen, smiled at Jane and then slowly paced his way to the living room wondering why he was in the kitchen, why he had keys in his hand, and why on earth he was wearing that horrid red sweater Jane had bought him.
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I was at a loss for names, so I used the generic “John Smith” and “Jane Doe”. Because it reminded me of the movie, Mr. and Mrs. Smith, I also used references from that movie, like the Coleman’s, John Smith as an engineer, etc. I also had the name Dr. Wezler, their marriage councellor, in my mind but I realized later I never even mentioned the doctor’s name. Haha.
Yeah, it’s science fiction mixed with the typical problems of relationships. Yeah, it’s weird, but then again, what do you expect from a weird girl?